I'll keep this short because we seem to be on a ration of an hour of broadband each evening (thanks BT, that's really great of you). I've started work on the next part; a description of the Saxon prisoner (probably, it's only suggested implicitly that it's him) wandering around the heath after the battle. He's pretty worked up about things. I've gone for first-person to really explore his feelings in that situation.
In another strand of the story there's a hermit who spends some time wandering around on a moor after a battle. So far, I'm happy that I'm not repeating myself, but it's getting a bit close for comfort. Things would improve if I had some things to contrast between the two of them. Overall, this piece needs a bit of meditation and some extra depth adding. Perhaps it would be beneficial to go and wander around on a moor. Whatever I do, it needs some careful thought.
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